1) 'Telling detail' and 'detail' are not the same thing. Many new
writers describe every movement a character makes. These details
aren't necessary. Readers know how to open doors, drive cars, get dressed and so
on. What they don't know, when they begin reading a story, is the stuff your
character is made of; that's the 'telling detail' you need to show (not tell)
them.
2) While your story needs a beginning, middle and end, everything that
happens in each scene (or chapter) does not. A character doesn't need to enter a
room, engage in a conversation or series of actions and dialogue, leave the
room, mull over what was said while he gets ready for bed and drift off to
sleep. Start the scene or chapter as close to the point it is there to convey
and end it as soon as possible after the information you want the reader to have
has been provided. This is doubly important when writing erotica. Every erotic
encounter doesn't have to start with foreplay and end with orgasm. Honest.
3) Avoid 'ing' words as much as possible. You'll still use a lot of them
and that's OK but if you don't have to use one, don't. In particular, try not
to start your sentences with 'ing' words. Often, new writers think they are
starting a new sentence with a verb when in fact they are starting it with a
gerund. Gerunds are very tricky. Stay away from them. Subject Verb Object is the
natural order of a sentence. Stick with that and you'll be fine.
4) Every verb doesn't need to be preceded by three, two, or even one
adverb. Every noun doesn't need to be preceded by three, two, or even
one adjective. Look at it this way: there are thousands upon thousands of words
that are eager to appear in your story. Some of them are worthy of a place in
your piece and others are not. New authors are particularly fond of
writing: She smiled. Really, it's rarely required. Other oft repeated
descriptions that are usually unnecessary are: He nodded. She shrugged. Or, even
worse: He nodded his head. She shrugged her shoulders. Most of the time you
don't need to write any of this and you never need to write: She shrugged her
shoulders. There is no other body part that shrugs. This is also true of: He
nodded his head, except in erotica, where on occasion a man might nod another
body part. Simply put: Make words work hard to be in your story.
5) Most of the time, the only tag needed in dialogue is the name of the
character who is speaking, or the pronoun representing that character and the
word 'said.' Sometimes a writer might use 'asked' or 'replied.'
Occasionally, characters may shout, whisper, or mumble. Almost all new writers
overdo their tags. One character 'vehemently demands' to know what's going on,
while another 'whispers coquettishly and batts her eyelashes' while saying a
flirty line. This quickly becomes annoying. The truth is that 'said' is so
common in literature that readers' eyes actually skim right over it. That keeps
the dialogue and action moving and that's what you want. On this topic: people
do not 'smile' or 'laugh' their dialogue. Ok?
Madeline Moore is the author of many pieces of fiction including Sarah's Education. More of Madeline's work can be found by visiting: http://moremadelinemoore.blogspot.ca,https://twitter.com/MsMadelineMoore.
http://www.facebook.com/madeline.moore.906 and http://www.amazon.com/Madeline-Moore/e/B002BLU57O.
"Every erotic encounter doesn't have to start with foreplay and end with orgasm."
ReplyDeleteSo true! The "little sex scenes" are often among my favorites, as a reader. In media res and in flagrante delicto are not mutually exclusive.
I didn't know these were being posted until today. Must come back and read everybody else's tips. I betcha there's lots of good ones!
ReplyDelete